The day was young but I was feeling a century old and feeble.My heart was mourning and my emotions were overheated. Hope the divine feeling was lost in the maze of the world. My life had fallen head over heels.Nothing mattered anymore because I thought that I was dead to the world like its to me .The sun was burning yellow and my soul was like the pit of darkness.The climb that day changed the way I saw things and I also found my long parted friend hope on it. My body was numb when I first started the climb on the hope mountain.My mind was full of messy stuff , hatred , problems ,fear, disappointment , disgust , anger , sadness , contempt and awe etc. Negativity was running through my blood .My backpack was full of my freaky emotions.On my way up the mountain instead of trees ,birds and animals.I just saw the things I have lost because of pessimism, frustration and negativity. I saw love, confidence, audaciousness ,compassion, passion, enthusiasm , trust ,care,peace and happiness etc etc.All the positive energy was in front of me but I couldn't even absorb teeny weeny bit of it.Because I had no hope.I was as strange as an alien to this place.But as I climbed one forth of the mountain I felt something changing. I felt a spark of light in my black heart. The spark made me continue ascending .That spark was not temporary it was increasing after every few steps.My steps became faster because I wanted more .Glee soon griped me and to my surprise I was smiling .The next couple of hours were blissful and so cheerful. Just as I was near the peak I saw the hut of optimism.I rushed towards it with high animal spirits but still astonished of the changes .I went in and came out of it as a new born. What happened inside is a secret which will always reside in my heart.But now I had the brighter view of life in front of me.All the things had a different feel and colour.Then by leap and bounds I got to the peak.And there awaited the hope for me with arms wide open.Hope to live,hope to be happy,hope to face the music and be who I am.Do whatever makes me feel positive and always support the truth .I descended back with my long separated friend hope and with the real me.That climb made me realize the worth of me and the worth of the precious hope.These words made sense that day:
" You don't have to feel like a waste of space
"You are original cannot be replaced "
"If you only knew what the future holds"
"After a hurricane comes a rainbow"
lyrics of song firework
khushu.............................
its really nice to see your first blog. Everything seems very nice. Great idea and imagination with good usage of words....keep it up...my all good wishes are with you...
ReplyDeletethanx alot ana!!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written with colours of hope and your strong personality .
ReplyDeleteExcellent work, loved reading it.
I feel like writing too after reading it.
Love
I read it and first words out of my mouth were she climbed the mountain she is complete. good for you may Allah make your world easy and happy forever.
ReplyDeletethanx alot ana suhni!! its great that u also feeling like writing and u should start it soon..................
ReplyDeleteSo lovely. Idea is so mature that I do not want you to be there but I am proud you can handle yourself. Keep posting. Asif.
ReplyDelete@ ali!!thanx you soo much !!
ReplyDeleteI am enthralled, my darling. This is a beautiful piece. Please do keep writing. I will look forward to reading your next one.xo
ReplyDelete@ mama asif!thankyou mama! its great that u liked it! mama we need to meet soon so you can know that I have grown up! and I am no more that small khushu of urs!!
ReplyDeleteNow this is a kind of start you needed to have, Inspiring <3
ReplyDelete@ ana samina,i love it that u like it and yeah me planing to write more!
ReplyDelete@ ruhal! thanxx alot!!:-D
ReplyDeleteIt's inside all of us, hope is. Some choose to let it die within there selves, others however use it as a flash light for the road ahead :) I'm glad you chose the later. Nice Start btw.
ReplyDeleteAwesome. More importantly, it has the beginning, the body and the end. which is obviously acceptable to everyone.
ReplyDeleteHave you gone through the book "Black girl in the search of God" by I.I.Kazi? If not, go through it even today. You would find more imaginative journeys and opinions of different people belong to different schools of thought.
Sheeraz
Any way, you deserve to be applauded.
It is really Pleasant to begin my day with the Hope! As if this divine spirit runs through me too :) Keep it up Dear. Good Work!
ReplyDelete@baakh!!thanxx alot!!
ReplyDelete@thank you!! no I haven't read that book!!
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ReplyDelete@ seema!! thanx alot!!:-D
ReplyDeleteVery nice blog..please keep writing..Yes we have to be positive and hopeful in every kind of circumstances, I think this is the only way we can bring the change
ReplyDelete@ chacha siraj,thanx alot!yeah hope and positivity are key to change!!
ReplyDeletekhushu!!this is lodable peice of work i reckon!i like it alot
ReplyDeleteMashaAllah. This is good work. Following words have made it a marvelous work at the start.
ReplyDelete"divine feeling was lost in the maze of the world."
"My life had fallen head over heels"
"numb", "contempt", "audaciousness", "absorb teeny weeny bit of it."
"as strange as an alien"
"ascending"
"Glee soon griped me and to my surprise I was smiling ."
"All the things had a different feel and colour."
The use of idioms, expressions, and similes have made this work beautiful.
@Khusbakht: Destiny awaits for you. Keep on writing.
MashaAllah.
@ faria !thanxx alot!!!!..........:-D
ReplyDelete@ sir ameen, ur comments were long awaited by me!! thanxx for all ur appreciation and also the analysis !!........u also have a great part in my writing!!! so thanx for that BIG PART tooo.
ReplyDeletei love how beautifully u've put light on one of the essential yet much ignored feeling of hope.. no doubt its hope that makes us walk through the difficulties of life with confidence n sanity!!
ReplyDeletegreat concept Khushu.. n richly expressed!!
waiting to read ur next work!!
luv! :)
@ zaira! thanx alot! yeah the second blog is under construction and soon will be uploaded!!~love u too <3
ReplyDeleteIt’s a beautiful writing; especially the use of words is appreciable. I see some punctuation mistakes in it, however; I don't know how much punctuation is important in such art of writing – you better check it next time.
ReplyDeleteI cannot write such a mature thing...
Good Luck for future.
Shahid
Now that's called a great piece of art...
ReplyDeleteIts really really inspiring khushu loved it and keep on going and i can tell u that u can become a good writer ofcourse....
Your Close Friend hope u recognise me...
@ yeah i recognized yew!!! and thanxxx alott!!:-)
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